She,
a dark planet
stuck in the orbit of expectation
something will save her
from the debris littering the path she chose
An undesire to reflect
on why the universe
will never realise her wishes
He, a cold supernova,
burnt out,
no longer lights her way,
too busy planning his black-hole oblivion
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loved the he an’ she reference to cosmic happenings…
in fact loved the whole… (black hole?) 😉
xPenx
Nice pun, Pen 🙂
This is wonderful…the juxtaposition of sexes…and the title is perfect!
Lady Nyo….never thought about using the Universe in such a way, but it really works!!
Thank you, Lady Nyo – it started out as just humans but then the universe crept in
A stella poem (couldn’t resist that – haha) – love it!
ha, ha – very good, Gabrielle 😀
The personification of a planet and a star works really nicely, making the poem about large scale issues as well as personal ones. I like the way you describe the expecting one and the one who disappoints. They appear quite separate from one another, failing to communicate or cooperate with one another for a more hopeful resolution.
Thanks for your great feedback, Elaine.
oh – perfection! stuck in the orbit of expectation — a burnt-out supernova. I have died and gone to poetry heaven.
🙂 😀