Autumn, we lay lines,
unfurling across alpine waters,
to flycatch a trout’s eye
Spring,
we are copper lizards
on rocks trailing
the flowered creases
of Crackenback
Autumns and summers,
we zigzag
to the summit,
always a marking of sorts –
birthdays, deaths, waiting out
open-heart surgery –
from afar
A lifetime of seasons
ago – before I left –
you said
the mountain came down
and swallowed lives,
wanted me to know
that bad things happen elsewhere
too
as if somehow that would make
me see,
stay…
Now, it’s winter –
we’re making virgin
tracks
in snow
when the eye
of a raven catches
mine,
a gelid reminder
of these invisible scars –
the ley lines
that connect this place
to your passing
Where is Crackenback?
It’s in the village of Thredbo in the Snowy Mountains, 6 hours south-west of Sydney – we’ve spent a lot of long weekends there 🙂
Superb! Threads running among threads and connected via your own looking from a distance through memory.(which I suppose is what ley lines is all about – you only see the patterns from a distance – a bit like the Inca Nazca lines as well) – love the ‘lay lines’ and ‘ley lines’ at the beginning and the end.
Thank you, Gabrielle – I love that you have interpreted this so perfectly in accord to where it’s come from 🙂
What I love about the photograph is it could just as easily been here in Canada. We are all connected through lines of similarities and differences. I also appreciated the symmetry/mirroring of the lay-ley lines opening and closing of the poem. Well done! Now feel like composing a poem.
Thank you elmediat 🙂 – I like your notion of us all being connected through lines of similarities and differences. I am looking forward to spending time reading your blog – the subject matter is of great interest to me. (and look forward to your poem 😀 )
Strong emotion and connection, make for lasting memories., bb, so much heart and soul in this one. Life, and what it means to live season by season.
Savoured it. xPenx
Many full circles connected to this place, Pen, as you say, season by season – thanks xx
A place to remember… to celebrate anniversaries, and feel close to the past. Bb I find this very emotional and beautifully written.
Thanks, Adee, for this lovely comment – the emotional significance of this place is multi-layered in both happy and sad ways for me
this reminds me…i need to go on vacation
ha, ha – yes, Eva, shortbreaks, longbreaks, they’re all good. Will be taking a short break to your part of the world this year so will pop into Mazedar (if I can find it) for a healthy snack 😀
o0o thats so cool!!!
The visible and invisible ties that bind over time and place. Poetry that packs a wallop, Bluebee – the very best kind.
Thank you, Monica – hope all is well on your side. bb xx
Beautiful! Seasons that mark our passing 🙂
Thank you, Jan – their passing reminds us we’re getting on 🙂
I just discovered your site, BB. I am really impressed by the poems.
This one in particular has a beautiful and wistful poignancy.
thank you.
John
Thank you, John, for your comment – this place that has particular resonance for me in terms of some of my life’s major events, so the sojourns there are always bittersweet 🙂 bb.
Stunning words – you write so wonderfully xx
Thank you, dear Chloe 🙂 xx
This speaks to me well, Bluebee. The configuration of the modern world– so hard to take a vacation and really get away from it all these days.
Hello Elaine – I agree It certainly is hard to find time to get away from it all – the short breaks do me well these days – recharge the batteries like a good siesta 🙂
What a delightful p.m. surprise for me. Bitter-sweet vacation memories. I like it very much.
Poem on …
Bittersweet, for sure, Jamie – thanks for expressing your enjoyment (and for the encouragement 🙂 )
Hi bluebee – great piece! I really like the connections with ley lines and especially this paragraph
Autumns and summers…open-heart surgery – from afar
And the ending gives it that feeling of temporariness that suits the poem. And your photo is a great match
Hello Ashley 🙂
Thanks for this considered commentary – I am enjoying your thought-provoking blog.
I love this poem. It has such a peaceful sense of longing. I liked it so much I read it to my mother. Definitely one of my favorites.
Thank you, Coin & Feather, and for the compliment of sharing it with another 🙂
nice nice and the image just got me hooked up!
Thanks, Habiba 🙂
I love this, BB. Time passes swiftly and we don’t notice until we go somewhere which points to its passing. Beautiful.
Thanks, Kate – I’m sometimes shocked at, indeed, how swiftly it seems to be passing
powerful powerful poem. the theme of time passing in regret while the raven and landscape still surround us with their beauty is a classic theme, and you handle it really really well.
Thank you, Thomas – this is a very personal poem and I truly value your comment, which I know is borne out of a deep empathy
Whoa. This is a powerful one, Bluebee.
It’s a place that has that effect, Elaine
lovely piece!
Thanks, Anne.
Wonderul adventure in words through seasonal creativity and growth.
Thanks, Ken
Hi Bluebee,
Apparently I already Liked and commented on this. A set up for a quite sad end. I still like it. Thank you for your visit and Like on my blog. It was nice to see you among the viewers/Likers today. Happy blog break!
I hope you won’t mind if I pass you a link re: your lemon/heaven poem, since the comments are closed. Made me recall I had worked a brief piece around the same adage:
Best,
Elaine
Thanks so much, Elaine.